Hi everyone,

I am in the process of writing an essay on dogs for school. Yes, school

Anyway, i wrote up a draft and i'd be interested in your opinion. Just
let me hear if you got anything to say about it. I'm very open to
constructive criticism, suggestions on additional topics, philosophical
point of views on the whole thing, in particular on the level of
consciousness of these animals and what we can learn from it about
human nature - or whatever pops into your mind really. Please leave out
typos for the moment and consider that english is not my
motherlanguage.

the document can be found under
http://docs.google.com/View?docid=dd9nn4z8_2f9m5sh i'll add you as
collaborator if you wish so you can edit straight into the document

Anything appreciated

Fabian Winiger wrote:
Hi everyone,

I am in the process of writing an essay on dogs for school. Yes, school

Anyway, i wrote up a draft and i'd be interested in your opinion. Just
let me hear if you got anything to say about it. I'm very open to
constructive criticism, suggestions on additional topics, philosophical
point of views on the whole thing, in particular on the level of
consciousness of these animals and what we can learn from it about
human nature - or whatever pops into your mind really. Please leave out
typos for the moment and consider that english is not my
motherlanguage.

the document can be found under
http://docs.google.com/View?docid=dd9nn4z8_2f9m5sh i'll add you as
collaborator if you wish so you can edit straight into the document

Anything appreciated

Well, I haven't read very far into it, but I already have some
comments. Keep in mind, please, that I'm not a professional editor, or
even an expert. I simply have a good grasp of the English language and
its grammatical structure. With that being said, I would like you to
clarify in your own mind whether this is an essay, or elaborate notes
for a speech. It reads more like elaborate notes for a speech since it
begins as such. Please make sure you capatalize "I" when speaking in
first person. Please don't write slang such as "gonna." I admit, I
use this in my everyday speech, but when writing a paper for a grade,
it's pretty much a no-no. I'll try to continue to read it, but my
opinion, from a grammatical standpoint, is that it needs more work. As
far as content goes, I haven't had a dog in a few years, but it's
always fun to lurk in this forum.

loOP9 wrote:
Fabian Winiger wrote:
Hi everyone,

I am in the process of writing an essay on dogs for school. Yes, school

Anyway, i wrote up a draft and i'd be interested in your opinion. Just
let me hear if you got anything to say about it. I'm very open to
constructive criticism, suggestions on additional topics, philosophical
point of views on the whole thing, in particular on the level of
consciousness of these animals and what we can learn from it about
human nature - or whatever pops into your mind really. Please leave out
typos for the moment and consider that english is not my
motherlanguage.

the document can be found under
http://docs.google.com/View?docid=dd9nn4z8_2f9m5sh i'll add you as
collaborator if you wish so you can edit straight into the document

Anything appreciated

Well, I haven't read very far into it, but I already have some
comments. Keep in mind, please, that I'm not a professional editor, or
even an expert. I simply have a good grasp of the English language and
its grammatical structure. With that being said, I would like you to
clarify in your own mind whether this is an essay, or elaborate notes
for a speech. It reads more like elaborate notes for a speech since it
begins as such. Please make sure you capatalize "I" when speaking in
first person. Please don't write slang such as "gonna." I admit, I
use this in my everyday speech, but when writing a paper for a grade,
it's pretty much a no-no. I'll try to continue to read it, but my
opinion, from a grammatical standpoint, is that it needs more work. As
far as content goes, I haven't had a dog in a few years, but it's
always fun to lurk in this forum.

Yes, I'm replying to my own message. I skimmed your message and
invariably failed to notice the part about typos. WIth that being
said, I apologize. Also, since it's hard for me to read for content
beyond the "typos," I wish you luck and hopefully someone here can
offer you the assistance you need. Good luck!

Hi, thanks for your time! Yes originally it was just notes for a
speech, then i turned it into a speech in essay form (reading out) but
now its just too much to fit into the given 4 minutes of talking i get

yes i got into the habit to just write down how it comes out and then
run over it with a spellchecker when its finished, so my writing flow
doesnt get caught up in how to spell things properly
cheers, fabian


Yes, I'm replying to my own message. I skimmed your message and
invariably failed to notice the part about typos. WIth that being
said, I apologize. Also, since it's hard for me to read for content
beyond the "typos," I wish you luck and hopefully someone here can
offer you the assistance you need. Good luck!

Dear


Thanks for your time. No offense, but I think your ****ed in the head
and need to increase the dosage of the lithium and zoloft you
mentioned. I also recommend you to talk with someone you trust about
your feelings. This is a newsgroup (or maybe an AmAzyinglY wikkDly
sImPl3 GoOg0l GrOuPPZ II in your case) and not a place where you go
when you'd rather be somewhere else.

Kind Regards, Fabian

And please, please leave the dogs out of the game, its not their fault.

wrote:
HOWEDY Fabian,

Fabian Winiger wrote:
Dear


Thanks for your time.

You're welcome. It took abHOWET nine HOWERS of work to review
your essay and reply to it using QUOTED CASE HISTORY DATA and
SCIENTIFIC EVIDENCE refuting EVERYTHING you've been taught by
the likes of cesar milan, the monkeys of not so new skeete and the
doggy
breed RACISTS who's "work" you cited nearly verbatum without crediting
them. It was strictly my pleasure, Fabian.

That's NINE HOURS AssHowe could have put forward volunteering to help
with animal rescue. Not that anyone wants that, though - nor something
he'd ever do. After all, he's "training dogs all over the whole wild
world sitting there stark ravin nekkid" in his feeble mind.